Tuesday, April 28, 2009

Thanks group!

So, after today's feedback, I know exactly what to do. I've realized that I want to tell my story more than I want to show spectacle. Everyone who has read my play, it's a musical that explains a love story between two men in 1930's France. I feel like I need to return to that before I consider anything else. Thanks group!

New Play Creation with Kirk Lynn

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Making Mickey More Lovable

When I decided I was finished with my play and ready to have it reviewed by the group, I was excited because I liked it a lot. I was ready to hear about what other people's reactions would be. Before my group meeting, there were several problems (particularly concerning how the audience perceives my protagonist) that I had not realized. The way that I was previosely launching my main character into the event that my play is based on was causing the audience to view Mickey as immature and selfish, when I want it to seem like a risky but necessary thing. I just made Isabel a little less against it to achieve that. The comments that I got seemed so obvious and smart, and I couldn't believe I hadn't realized them before. When trying to incorporate these ideas into my play, I didn't want to completely erase scenes and start over, so instead I went through each of my lines and changed it so that it would fit the new content (the content to make Mickey a likable guy and instill audience trust in him). I also tried to add more of Tracy at the end and solidify the "hitting on Mickey" bit. Before I turn it into Jenny, I think it would be appropriate to mention more about the baby throughout, and really develop that aspect. I could possibly show Mickey's progression (how he changes) through that.

Monday, April 27, 2009

workshopping and aristotle...

Well... I haven't checked the syllabus, but it feels like it's probably time to write another blog post. Most likely, I missed the last one from neglecting to check the schedule, and if so... so sorry Jenny! End of semester lack of diligence...

So... I am really looking forward to tomorrow's workshops, and am also sort of glad that I'm in a group without anyone from the previous group (I really do love all you guys, don't take it personally!) so that they can look at it with fresh eyes. I totally agree with Julia that after doing several drafts, you think each one is great, until you start the next rewrite and change a thousand things, and I for one am losing, as a result, all objectivity (if I ever had it!) On that note... were we supposed to have read everyone's plays by Tuesday? I have yet to get my group's plays, if so... haha you know who you are, guys! :)

And Jenny, I would love to second Julia's rewriting question: How do you know when enough is enough? It seems like everything can be dissected eternally, but if we had eternity to rewrite, nothing would ever be finished! :)

Workshopping Tomorrow

"Activity - the physical thing your character is doing
Action - Physical Activity + Intention
Event - Physical Activity + Intention + The CONTEXT of time and circumstance"

Agreed.  Sorry, Jenny.  No arguments.  This is everything that I was trying to say in class, but couldn't, because I've recently become very inarticulate in a classroom setting.  This is an issue.  

So coming into this week's class, I've completely redone my play.  At least, that's the way it feels to me.  I don't know how legit playwrights do it- it seemed like I slaved over it for the last few days.  And even now, with a TON of cuts and additions and changes and revisions, it still doesn't feel like something I'll ever be able to hand over to someone and say "Okay, it's ready.  Take it and run."  So I guess my question is, how do you know?  Do you ever?  I feel a sense of closure after every draft, then pick it back up and make ten thousand more changes each time.  Does the madness ever end?  Do you just stop when people stop having issues with it (as if they ever will)?  This is also an issue- I don't want to put this into my portfolio and pick it up the day it has been graded, read over it, and think "Jeezaloo (yes, jezz. a. loo.), what was I thinking here?"  I can't believe I'm saying this, but guys?  I'm with Celso this week.  Gloves come off.  Tear it apart.  It's for my own good.  

I'm also REALLY excited to start in small groups tomorrow after getting Sara and Burkard's plays.  After reading Burkard's, I feel like workshops from last week helped everyone (not just me :) and I hadn't had the opportunity to read Sara's since I wasn't in her group- the story is REALLY cool.  Very, "I Never Promised You a Rose Garden"ish.  I like it a lot.  
So yay for tomorrow.
(I, along with Ashley, would also like to know who is taking playwriting II.  It's always cool to see familiar faces.)

Sunday, April 26, 2009

Activity, Action, Event

I think this is right, I am modeling it off of Jenny's post. Please correct me if I'm wrong.

Activity - Jenny's parents kiss in the kitchen.

Action - They have their "Tuesday Kitchen Kiss," something they intend on doing every Tuesday.

Event - Jenny's dad rejects her mother for the Tuesday Kitchen Kiss--this would be intentional and have repercussions.

Or...(And this example I am less sure of)

Activity - Jenny walks out the door for the first time. Obviously this is a physical activity. I'm confused though, because this activity could have repercussions and could be intentional. Is this the same as writing "Exit CHARACTER NAME" in a play?

Action - Jenny walks out the door a second time. This is intentional because she repeats the activity to build tension among the students?

Event - Jenny says "I've had enough!" and leaves the room. This is definitely intentional and has repercussions for all.

Activity, Action, Event

Lily, Good Post.
For Posterity's sake (or to start an argument -- go ahead, guys, whatcha got???)

Activity - the physical thing your character is doing
Action - Physical Activity + Intention
Event - Physical Activity + Intention + The CONTEXT of time and circumstance. An action with repercussions.

Friday, April 24, 2009

Jenny wanted me to post the difference we articulated in class between an action and an activity...
ACTIVITY is the physical action that is occurring (teeth brushing)
ACTION is the physical activity plus an objective, a motivation (brushing teeth to avoid cavities..)

Thursday, April 23, 2009

Team Beckett #7

Aghhhh! Rewrites! This current round of rewriting is freaking me out because I've basically thrust my story 15 years into the future. Talk about messing with time. I'm excited about how Jenny divided us into our final workshopping groups and I'm looking forward to next week. I hope workshopping with Chibbi, Josh and Lily will really cater to our specific revising/editing questions concerning time. I was also thinking about the timeline Chibbi uses in his play. More specifically, the order of his scenes. And I like the fact that he started his play with the last scene of the story. There are gun shots and two of the main characters die. I was wondering if something like that would work well with my play. Because in my last scene, there is a murder and one of the main characters dies. Some of my peers thought that type of violence was too abrupt. So I was thinking about showing it first and working my way backward. I know that I will still need to set it up properly and justify the scene. But I like the idea of getting it out there from the get-go. Any thoughts?

P.S. Is anyone taking Playwriting II with Kirk next semester? Besides me and Julia, of course. :)

1 is the loneliest number, but 4 sucks

In my entire rewriting/writing process, I've had a lot of trouble simply because my play has four central characters. While that alone adds a challenge enough, to have their paths all intersect really cakes on the challenge. My question is, is anyone else finding themselves in that sort of situation and if so how are you dealing with it?

I will tell you it has given me a whole new respect for writers whoe are able to pull this off. To take a person from the start to the finish of a story is one thing, to take four a, and fully develop them to make it where anyone cares really requires so much thinking!

This weekend I saw the movie Duplicity. In spite of its all star cast, (Leading with Clive Owen and Julia Roberts) it has not done so well in the box office. For those who havn't heard about it, it is a story of two corporate spies who are lovers, that are caught up in a gigantic conglomerate deal that could make or break their career, as well as trying to balance their love life.

It sounds like a lot, and it is, however, it was very good movie. Smarter than anything I've seen in a long time. But, this is also its downfall. I felt like I just finished the LSAT because the plot was so overlycomplicated, (from the writer of Michael Clayton, if that gives you a hint) and it litterally wore you out.

But here is the point, to write something like that, with so many characters, and that intricate, is something that is truly bad @ss, but for those of us who can't write Michael Clayton or duplicity, what can we do?

Wednesday, April 22, 2009

Trying to be ready for tomorrow-

I'm spending a LOT of time getting another revised draft ready for tomorrow, but like Jenny suggested, I might only have 3 pages or so.

BUT if I do only have 3 pages, they will be the most awesome 3 pages ever.  

Actually, they'll be the 3 pages that need the most work.

Can't win.

Just a heads up.

Amber's Taboo

I'm not sure what the time manipulation strategy is called, but I refer to it as The Fried Green Tomatoes technique.  I like this strategy in this play.  It makes it more interesting than if it were a straight through narrative, I think. 

You introduce a lot of characters in scene 2 that seem unnecessary.  This is kind of confusing when I first read the play and was trying to figure out who was who and where they fit into everything.  I can see the purpose of Sarah in how she pops up later on, but not much with the other characters.  Why do we need to see Sam and Christina?

You don't differentiate between the scene with Julie and Carlie and the scene in the present with Julie and Amerie.  There is a blackout in between, so there should be a new scene.  When you switch back and forth between time, it helps to clarify things for the reader with a definite scene change.

I liked the flow of the dialogue and the structure of the scenes except for Julie's monologue at the top of scene 4.  Lots of what she says seems too blatant, like she's speaking some subtext aloud.  Maybe there are ways you can show these things without her having to say them outright. 

What's with Amerie and her guy?  You introduce some issues and they are never really explained or anything.

I wasn't sure at the end of act 1 whether or not Carlie died, was this intentional?

Is the ethereal voice that tries to get Julie not to take the pills Carlie?

I liked the resolve Julie has at the end.  The fact that she made it through.  

Bryan's Mickey

I took notes during class, listening to the discussion of Bryan's play.  I remembered one comment, that his play was reminiscent of Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory, which I forgot about until I got to the last pages of the play.  Then I realized that that was a very spot on comparison.  I like the setup of this and the whole Willy Wonka premise, the surprise tests to sees who is the best fit and all that.  I think you can really expand upon this.  

Maybe you could show little scenes of Dewey and Maverick before the audition.  That way we can get more of a backstory to these guys.  At this point they seem pretty one dimensional, with Maverick being the antagonist to the good guy Mickey.  Seeing more of them at the beginning will help build the story and raise the stakes for these two characters, as well as divert the attention from Mickey so that we don't suspect he gets the part at the end.  Even if you want to keep Maverick as a straight antagonistic figure, you could make us dislike him before the audition.

I was wondering about the significance of scene 3 ending with the three men delivering the monologue in unison?  Repeating such a long monologue, and with overlapping voices, at the end of the scene seems such a big move and I can't decipher it.

I was confused about the layout of the audition room.  I thought it said it was one big room and the receptionist and the other people auditioning are on the other side.  So can they hear what's going on over there?  Is it split stage?  

Maybe Maverick can dig himself a deeper hole and make more of an ass of himself before Mr. Baron jumps in to end it.  Build it up more for a bigger payoff.  

I also thought the snickering of Mr. Baron and Tracy during Maverick's audition gave away too much too soon.  
This is a quick monologue I wrote - ROUGH! - after going to a baseball game yesterday. I am still very alarmed by college sports. Call it one thing that I haven't adjusted to yet. I'd appreciate any feedback any has time to give!

What would your song be? I mean, every single baseball player has one, every single one. How on earth do they ever decide? It’s an impossible decision. Imagine it. You make it through high school as the star player, and get your scholarship to play baseball in college (yay). It’s your freshman year, you’re caught up in the glamorous grunge and independence of college life, parties (yay) girls (yay) sports (double yay). But at the same time, it’s a lot of pressure: to impress, to aspire, to achieve, to hit balls really hard and catch them when nobody else can, send your body twisting in opposing directions at ludicrous speeds to smack a ball, throw yourself with no, or very little, regard for your safety and well being at a red and white bullet while people cheer and boo if you miss. And that’s when they’re feeling generous. You have all this going on around you. It’s blinding, intoxicating, gut0churning. And some Assistant to the Assistant Assistant Coach comes up to you in the middle of this tornado that has become your life and says, “Hey, buddy, by the way, what’s your theme song?” What the fuck. 

Tuesday, April 21, 2009

Writing is rewriting, then rewriting the rewrites...

Is it just me or is anyone kinda overwhelmed going into draft two of their long play?  I was afraid to look at all the notes because I want to make so many edits and I find the task extremely daunting, lurking like the Sword of Damocles.  There's so much I want to cut or embellish, the possibilities are overwhelming me somewhat.  I'm having a hard time trying to jump back into it and pick up on a scene in the middle of the play and just play around with it.

I think what I'm going to do is separate my scenes and save them all as separate files so I can see them alone and focus on editing and rewriting one scene at a time.  I always want to conquer the entire script at once and I think that is why I have been so intimidated to do my rewrites.  If I approach it like the short plays at the beginning of the semester and just take it one bit at a time I think it will chug along fine.

Are there any successful tips or strategies for rewrites that have been particularly helpful to you guys?  

Friday, April 17, 2009

When is specific too specific?

I might be getting a little lost in my rewrites. On the one hand I’m trying to lose all the fat from the dialogue and stage directions; on the other, I’m trying to be specific and clear, so that it won’t be open to too many interpretations.

It seems the balance between a) captivating audiences, b) conveying the author’s intentions and c) not taking over the director’s job can only be achieved with a lifetime of fasting and meditation. Right now, I feel like there’s a conflict of interest between the two hemispheres of my brain – and they’re about to go to court over it.

Three of Michael’s rules seem especially relevant to my current dilemma:

12) Be specific; if something in the play matters to you, feel free to describe it in intricate detail - an accent, a prop, a set, a light cue, a costume, a speech pattern, anything.

13) Don't specify everything; leave enough room so that a production team can keep its job. Once the director picks up your play, consider yourself dead - the play is the living work, not you. Don't direct from beyond the grave.

14) Specifically forbid directors in your text from doing anything stupid and dumb that you hate. If something is really important, write a few guidelines right into the stage directions. God knows you're more brilliant than them.

I’ll give you one example of the many passages in my play I’m trying to rewrite and don’t know if I should go for more or for less. This is a moment when Benny is surprised to find Ruth in a compromising position, and Ruth tries to sound dignified and unapologetic:

(shaking his head in disappointment)

(distant and polite)

Am I playing director here by instructing the actor to make a specific gesture? And the actress to assume a certain air? If I remove the parentheticals, will the punctuation in their lines be enough to make it clear that Benny is surprised, and Ruth is not? (And what about the other emotions described in the parentheticals? Should they be left entirely at the discretion of the director?)

Perhaps the underlying concern in my present worries is Michael’s rule #14. If I include an unnecessary or excessive stage direction, the director can always choose to ignore it, and even contradict it, to imprint his own voice in his production (and I think he should; he’s an artist, too). But if an important aspect of my play is subtly insinuated in between the lines, am I not running the risk that it will go unnoticed by less…attentive directors?

In other words: should we try to bullet-proof our plays against bad direction?

Thursday, April 16, 2009

Aristotle Post

So, having uncharacteristically forgotten until the last minute that a blog post was due, I am frantically typing this before my first class begins. I hope it's relatively coherent.

Rewrites… lovely rewrites. I am so glad we've been going over strategies for this in the last couple of classes, because otherwise it would be quite overwhelming. On the one hand, you're sort of done "creating", per se, so it's easier. On the other hand, this is where all the real creativity comes in–– like trying to fit together the pieces of a puzzle. Or, to use one of Jenny's metaphors, like placing the dominoes perfectly in line.

I, for one, tend to lose my objectivity when I'm in the initial writing process, so it's really good to take a step back, survey your work logically, and be able to see the problems that need fixing.

Yikes... my professor just walked in the room… better post next time!

Wednesday, April 15, 2009

Workshopping and Such

Going into tomorrow, I just wanted to let everyone in my group know that even though I JUST gave you a new draft on Tuesday, it will have... you know, kind of drastically changed by tomorrow.  But we'll talk about it during the critical response process. :)

After meeting with Jenny, I kind of got (gently) whacked in the face with the fact that I was focusing my attentions on the wrong character.  I'm currently in the process of writing a little 15 minute play to redirect my attention on the Student, trying to implement her Mother a lot more, drawing some lines between Anne, la madre, y la chica.  

So woooo whooooooo for huge changes that make workshops trickier. 

Have lovely evenings, all. :)


I found that my play got discussed well in group One. I think that the work in groups is great because as a foreigner, I'm sometimes afraid I might make mistakes while expressing something. But the atmosphere in the group is informal. Everybody has read the play and the comments were very different. Many of them were positive, especially those about the content of "Struggle For Life".

On the other side my tone was criticized as partly antique or too formal and some incoherences in the plot were observed. I'm looking forward to the completion of all the comments tomorrow because I feel that it really helps me, it is a thorough criticism, also not too softened, an opinion Celso published in his blog.

Right now, additionally, I also think that the theatrical or playwright "tools" we learned about are helpful, simple and working. What am I talking about?

I think to probe the logic chronological order of a play, especially plays with many flashbacks, as - for example - Ashley Moreno's "Liar" is very good for the author and for the audience as well. For this purpose, the timeline is a good means.

Then, the questions for ourselves are also rather good. Question 2 "Does each character have an emotional investment in the story's outcome - If not, why not?" helps to find out about character-forming flaws or flat vs. round characters within everyone's play in my opinion.

From the questions I also learned about ruthlessly cutting down on useless parts of the play, self-criticism must be applied in an honest way. But it does not help if others give you the best advice. So I think, everyone should honestly probe his/ her play to see where/ if there are weak points.

Tuesday, April 14, 2009

Brutal honesty: it’s for my own good

I couldn’t agree more with Chibbi’s post below. Patting ourselves on the back will only waste our time – it will deny us the chance to improve our plays and our skills before we present them to an audience of producers, critics and viewers who will not be keen to do us any favors.

So, please, when you read my play, and write down your notes, and share them with me in the coming classes, don’t think of my feelings. I’ll be happy to hear what you think worked, so that I can keep doing it, but I’m more interested in what you feel is boring, confusing, contrived, out of place, badly timed, doesn’t make sense, etc. By being strict to my work you will be kind and considerate to me, giving me your time, your attention, your insights and your wisdom.

I won't take offense -- even if I don't agree with your assessment, I'll value the outside perspective.

Tell me there is no Santa.
Tell me you saw her cheating on me.
Tell me I need to lose ten pounds.
Crack your knuckles and tear the damn thing apart.


so, i'm oh so excited about starting to read and work on each other's plays. like...yay!
coming up with those rules of theatre was also a lot of fun, but more challenging than i thought it would be. when thinking of them i started to think, ok, what is it that I want my play to be? what does my play need to make it great? and then when we were discussing these rules in class i started to ask myself, what is it that my play is lacking? how am i not achieving these goals that we have set up for ourselves? and i've always had a problem reworking my own stuff; i think because when i write something its like, this is what i thought of and this is how i think it should be, so its hard for me to see it from a different perspective and think of different ways to accomplish whatever it is i'm trying to accomplish, so i'm really looking forward to that outside perspective. its easier for me to critique other people's work because i'm looking at it through my perspective, so i can spot things that maybe the original writer did not, but it doesn't seem to work that way when working on my own stuff.
so basically i've been throwing my play at anyone who'll sit down from 20 minutes and read it and seeing what they have to say, but usually i don't get much more than, "i liked it" or "i'd go see it," or "that was good." i don't need to know that you think its good, i need to know what you think didn't work, wasn't good, needs improvement, etc so I can go back and fix that. with critiquing other people's work i'm basically going at it from the perspective of "this is how I would want someone to critique my stuff," and i believe in brutal honesty. i think we can all pat ourselves on the back for accomplishing what we have thus far, but its a lot harder and more necessary to acknowledge what we haven't accomplished, to slap ourselves in the face for...well, i don't want to say failing at, but there are things that we, you, me, haven't done well, or could do better, and this is what i'm concentrating on and what i'd like other people to call me out on as well. 
its the hardest thing to critique someone's work, because we all know how hard we've all worked on these plays and we don't want to put anyone down, everyone wants to be liked, but if we tip-toe around the edges we'll never get to the meat of things and there won't be any improvement. so i hope my comments aren't taken as "well you did this wrong and this is terrible, blah blah blah," and more as "this is where you need work, and here you could improve by yada yada yada." and i'm looking forward to getting those same kinds of critiques.
brutal honesty. i wont be offended, and i hope others wont either.

Saturday, April 11, 2009

Team Beckett #6

During Erin's lecture on Thursday I leaned over toward Chibbi and whispered, "I know who she is! She played Alice in Portrait." Duh. I think the voice gave it away.

I thought I'd post our "Master List" of rules for good theatre/plays:

1. Journey/Change
2. Audience Affected
3. Must have a reason; "Why?"
5. Necessary
6. Universal
7. Duration
8. Plot
10. Surprise
11. Metaphor
12. Tone (Comedy/Tragedy)

As my workshop group will soon figure out, I decided to expand my 7-page play into the longer play we were assigned to write. I didn't plan on using the same piece, but after workshopping "Liar," I realized it was begging for expansion and revision. So I decided to put more work into. I'm still not satisfied with where it's at, and I hope to improve and make it a more complete, more whole piece once the semester is over. And I've been through a bajillion revisions.

During the workshopping process there were a ton of questions (and some comments) that came up:

How old are they?
Who's lying?
Who really screwed things up?
Who is the bad guy?
Who do you think is the liar? And what does that mean thematically?
"I don't know whether I should feel sorry for someone."
Are the mom and dad divorced?
What type of incest is this? Flowers in the Attic? Cruel Intentions?
Was the sex voluntary? Rape?
"I enjoyed that you basically didn't waste time."
"There is no question as to who the characters are. But I wonder if you can say it a little more eloquently."
How can it be more eloquent?
"I don't believe they've gone 5 years and 9 months with out divulging who the real father is."
"There is a lot of context."
"Could have been a longer play."
"Can it be expanded?" Michael was really pushing for expansion.
"Lends to taking time on each line."

In meeting with Jenny, I received the following notes:

1. Who is the protagonist? The sister or the brother? Or both?
2. What's at stake? The engagement? The child?
3. Why do you need the time lapses?
4. What is necessary to see on stage?
5. How would the play change if it occurred in one night? In two days?
6. Is the flashback, the monologue useful for the audience to see on stage? Or should they simply hear it?
7. To what degree is the boy at stake? What do we get if we see him on stage, if we never see him on stage? If he's younger?
8. Months collapse time on stage. Is it evaporating dramatic tension or is it making it melodramatic?

In the expansion of my play, I think I touched on all of the aforementioned points. Most of them anyway. I'm still having trouble deciding whose story it is. The brother? The sister? I have no idea who my protagonist really is. In some ways, they're equally protagonists until the very end of the play. Is that my answer? [By the way, I changed the ending in the expansion. The sister still dies, but she doesn't commit suicide.]

At the end of my meeting with Jenny, she gave me the following "mini assignments."

1. Ask questions, ask a million questions.
2. Create a timeline for characters - include things we don't see on stage.
3. Outline for play (DO THIS LAST).
4. Decide about mystery guy. [Sam.]
5. This is why it happened, this is how it happened, this is how it stopped.
6. He said/she said - from both voices.

During the revision process of our long plays, I think I will revisit these suggestions to get even more out of this story. I'm really looking forward to discussing my play on Thursday. I'm curious to see how this play works as a longer piece. I'm especially looking forward to hearing from those who were in my previous workshop group.

Did Erin look familiar to anyone?

I just realized that our guest professor Erin Philips...was the actress who played Alice Neel in Portrait! Damn tattoos threw me off.

It came to me while I revised my long play and tried to picture this elderly Jewish lady who's a bit of an important character in it. I thought of Alice Neel's cold, arrogant sarcasm, and how it would fit my character real well. The face (and the look) lingered on my mind for a while, then I struck me: I checked the program for Portrait, and there it was.

She'll be at the top of my list if I ever get to put this thing together for the stage. Okay, maybe after Liz Sheridan (Seinfeld's mother in the series).


Thursday, April 9, 2009

This is for the acting majors

I want to take Directing I next semester, but I don't know who to take it with. Stephen Gerald or Lucien Douglas? Any thoughts?

There should be a disclaimer

Does everyone realize that "drafts" are free game and everyone can read them? How embarrassing! That means everyone can read my incoherent, jibberish-filled notes and outlines.

Class Today, 4/9

Guys!  I am having this huge epiphany!!!  And I had to share it...

I thought that I had already arrived at this realization after Jenny and I had our first one on one meeting.

"Actors aren't stupid.  Actors are good."

And while I silently nodded, "Why yes!  Yes they are!"  to this statement, I never fully acknowledged what it meant.  I just smiled and kept writing lengthy, descriptive stage directions (man take left hand and grabs right cheek of woman slowly pulling her to kiss him for 3.832 seconds then breaking away, etc...).

But only when I started working new monologues for main stage auditions did I stop to analyze what I as an actor was doing with the text I was using.

I was tearing it apart:  throwing in lines that came before or after the chunk of monologue I'd chosen, slashing out portions of the text that I didn't need, and changing a tiny word here and there that completely changed the meaning or purpose of the piece.

I realized (for real, this time) that I'd never be able to micromanage every actor's performance of my script.  Do I want to, anyway? NO.  Because if I had playwrights breathing down my neck for everything I ever did... well, I probably wouldn't want to act anymore.

So I think I'm just going to write from now on.  I'm trying to keep my stage directions down to a phrase or two, and not write in emotional verbs like "speaking angrily" because hopefully my actors can gather the tone from the writing.  If not, I have more work to do.

Also, I think our class today with Erin was really helpful- it's always interesting to have new perspective on stuff that you've been talking about for a long time, you know?

So.  I'm:
-Raising my stakes/upping my level of conflict.
-Deleting a character. ;)
-Reinforcing the journey/change that has taken place... making it more prominent.

Once those are done, we'll see where I'm at.  Still won't be perfect, obviously, but I have a feeling it's going to be a lot better.  And a little shorter.

Have a great Easter weekend, everyone!

Wednesday, April 8, 2009


1) Plot- to me its the essential part. It is the necessary component that is the skeleton of what you are creating. Meaning, if you don't have it, then you have nothing.

2) Spectacle- It is simply anything memorable about your play, from fireworks, to simply moments of silence, anything that would leave an impression on a child under five, is spectacle in my book. (Think about it)

3) Character- for me, they are the subject of the play defined by the action, personally I find they add a sense of realism but if one is not careful they can rob from the plot. So my rule is, they should be the agents of your story

4) Melody- Silent films aren't around for a reason. (though silence is sound) We have five senses for a reason, use it, music makes everything better

5) Thought- The most important, if your play is not well thought, it is not good, period. Sure, real life isn't carefully thought out, but even a play about real life is not real life so just do it!

6)Diction- It's the only thing you really control, I like the line from our packets that said, every line is a piece of DNA revealing the entire plot. This is the way I see diction, from "and's" to "I love you's" diction is what we are here to do

7)Entertaining: Be it a dark play or a funny one, make it memorably entertaing, its a show for GOD's sake!!!

a few ideas of what makes good theatre

1. must have well defined characters

2. must take a journey, move, travel, even if it ends up where it started

3. must raise questions for the audience; may or may not choose to answer those questions

4. should include surprise, suspense, comedy

5. have a purpose/point; accomplish an objective; have meaning

6. evoke/stir up emotions in the audience; captivate; intrigue; move them

7. be bold, unapologetic

8. the language should be intentional and committed


1. Must have conflict
2. Must have a strong relationship between characters (romantic or platonic)
3. It doesn't matter where the conflict is resolved as long as the story remains interesting
4. Costumes and settings must be unique and interesting
5. GOOD ACTORS bring the best writing to life
6. Acrobatics never hurt anyone...
7. Comedy (even the most serious story can have a joke or two)
8. Special effects (dont have to be professional but executed perfectly)
9. Plot of course





2.   Surprise

3.   Making the ordinary, extraordinary

4.   Taking the soul of a cliché and expressing it in a new way

5.   Blurring the line between black and white

6.   Showing us something we’ll never see again

7.   Asking uncomfortable questions

8.   Simplicity

9.   Sparkles

10.  The defiance and acknowledgment of The Fairy Tale Ending

11.  The audience

Even Theater has Rules.

Good Afternoon fellow theater lovers and playwrights! I would like to share with you a list...not my bucket list, but a list of rules for great theater!

1) Plot- Beginning Middle and End please. The beginning and the ending need to be clear and serve a purpose. The middle not so much. Personally I think it is fascinating when I watch a play and get a little confused in the middle. As long as the ending just ties it up or is surprising so I appreciate & understand the middle better. I don't want to be able to tell just what comes next. Thats boring. The plot itself should have an interesting story.

2) Spectacle! As said by my group in class, Spectacle too must surprise. It should have a meaning, in the words of Andy "not just have a random firework go off" like at a funeral scene or something, unless it has meaning. Spectacle can be subtle, size doesn't matter. Spectacle can be the lack thereof. But above all...MAKE IT MEMORABLE!

3) Character! Characters should be well thought out and relatable. Its also fun if there is an interesting web of relationships.

4) Comic relief. I think comic relief is very important. You can have a tragic play with comic relief. It helps the message you are trying to send stick to the audience. It also makes awkward moments bearable.

5) Any line being said should serve a purpose and be said clearly so the audience can understand it.

6) If you want to do something big, make sure you do it right. If it doesn't work, don't feel bad, try again or just don't do it.

7) Any sounds or music in the play should harmonize with the theme of the play. It should accentuate the world you are establishing.


Rules for Good Theatre

1. There must be a plot and conflict.

2. There must be at least some comedy, otherwise I think the audience gets bored/overburdened.

3. The characters must be strong enough that the audience will care what happens to them. (I admit, I am not sure I managed this in my long play.)

4. I think some sort of soundtrack is preferred--and by that I mean music appears at least a little, not only sound effects.

5. Most of the characters must be passionate about something/someone. And they can be passionate without being loud.

6. The set must not get in the way of the performance, it must not take away from the actors.

7. I wouldn't say this is a rule...but I love it when characters talk to and interact with the audience.

8. Good theater has a theme, it leaves the audience with something to think about. Ideally audience members will want to discuss the show afterward.

9. Good theater (as I said at the beginning of the semester) will make you relate to something, whether you could relate to it before you saw the play or not. It will teach you about yourself, and others who you may never know.

10. Good theater makes you very glad you moseyed out of your house to go see it. Good theater makes you want to come back and see it again with friends, or alone.

11. Good theater makes you think about life from a new angle, if only for a little while.

12. The Jenga example--every line must have a purpose. But then it's fun to confuse the audience or be a confused audience member, too.

13. I am finding that scenes should not ONLY develop characters, they need to move the plot forward, too. I'm not 100% sure this should be a rule, though.

14. A playwright should try to create an image or spectacle that will stand out in the audience's mind. Make them see something they've never seen before, or shed new light on the ordinary.

15. Don't have too many settings, it will throw people off. "Too many" is subjective, you decide.

16. Make sure flashbacks are quite clearly flashbacks...unless your goal is for the audience to be unsure that it's a flashback they're watching.

17. Do your research so that you know what really went down, but feel free to be as historically incorrect as you want.

18. Good theatre often offends people, and that's okay. Awesome, even!

19. The beginning of a play must be attention-getting and/or emotional, it must reel the audience in.

20. Scratch that last one--there are plenty of great novels that have slow beginnings and turn into pure awesome later, so I don't see why a play MUST begin with a bang. No reason to feed our already short attention spans. ...Granted, a play is not a novel, but I still stick by this.

21. Endings can be abrupt!


1, The plot is for me the most important thing. So THOUGHT in a play decides everything: that may be probable music, costumes, the details of the plot, lighting etc. - everything follow afterwards. 

2, For the detailed work on the plot, I think it is important to decide before the start of this work if the aim is an OPEN play (i.e. with many decisions up to the director etc.) or a DETERMINED play in which the author is very determined about the setting etc. (an example would be: 1960s, New York, Jazz music in a dimly lit bar, etc.)

3, An important thing is not only to create the CHARACTERS. It is also important to imagine them roughly and uninterruptedly to ask oneself: "Does the thing that the character does on stage, the thought he/ she has, the line he/ she speaks fit to his character?" I think that "mimesis" in the Aristotelian sense comes into (the) play here, just to narrow down the infinite possibilities a character could act like, to find a possible acting range for him or her. That is, to make it possible for the audience to follow the plot.

4, A play is not like reading a book in a silent chamber. Things can be shown in an allusional way and be entertaining and still carry serious content. Therefore, it is important as a playwright to ask oneself: "Can I use MUSIC (melody) here? Could I use NONVERBAL (paralinguistic) means to convey my plot idea (see 1,) to the audience? Is there any other means I can use (LIGHTING etc.)?" (An example are the mocked dance videos in the "101 ways to . . ." play of the New Works Festival).

5, Any play stands in the tradition of an oral and visual culture rather than that of scriptures (although the plot is the most important part). That means there is usually no possibility for the audience to follow very fine or abstract, infinitely philosophical etc. aims, but there is one idea or one story which is told. To use the power of the oral and visual tradition it might be useful to employ surprises and thus, create a SPECTACLE. But: It is important that the spectacle is not more important than the plot, that means it has to be used as a means to support it ("delectare et prodesse"). 

6, Any author has to think of the AUDIENCE he writes for. That is, because one play could cause ecstatic agreement or spiteful hatred or astonished non-understanding among its audience. An example would be to show the "101 ways to . . . " to 1,000 seventy-years-old farmers from Uzbekistan which would just not be understandable to them. 


The DICTION of any play has to follow the plot like every other part of it, too. But still, there is one important thing: The playwright has to find his OWN STYLE OF EXPRESSION. In my opinion, this relates not only to the diction but can be any other part serving the plot (for example a theme announcing a certain character etc.) It is good to quote, mock or rely on any other part of cultural evidence, like Greek myths in "The Psyche Project". I think, if a playwright imagines the characters of the play and combines it with his/ her aim the style of expression or the diction follows up naturally.

7 Rules for Good Theatre

A Good Play Must...

1. Have a plot the moves the characters forward.

2. Develop Opposing and Harmonizing characters.

3. Create a love story/ interesting relationships between the characters.

4. Be driven to teach a moral.

5. Maintain a balanced mixture of the arts

6. Discover truthful analysis of
psychology and humanities.

7. Have universal applications.

7 Rules to Great Theater

1. In my opinion, the one thing that makes a play go from a one to a ten, is if there is music and dancing. I always enjoy spectacle in any shape or form.

2. It's interesting that I would prefer a play's second most important need is a great plot. Not that I hate plays with no story. It's just that when I go to the theater I want to hear ideas that I've never heard before.

3. I also believe that a play's original thought or idea is important to the production of a play. The playwright's image is important to what he or she is trying to say.

4. I think monologues are great assets to plays. I always enjoy learning about what a character internalizes and how they think. It delivers a secret that can be difficult if delivered any other way.

5. Another way to show a person's feelings is a great light show. The lighting is perhaps the most important part of production that needs to deliver a squeaky clean performance.

6. Props and scenery aren't things that I hold too close to my heart, but I do enjoy a play if it has an elaborate stage. I do think that there needs to be some way to identify a play's location or idea with as much as possible.

7. Another thing that I find quite childish about myself is that I'm attracted to colors and costumes. I love colors that pop and make me think and feel exactly what a person's mind is.

8. Although I am a huge fan of tragic endings, I don't think that the whole play needs to be one tragedy after another. I like comedy in every play. Immense amounts of it, too. I love it when a play combines the horribly tragic with the deliciously funny.

8 Personal Rules for Good Theater

So... here are my personal rules for good theater. Just as an aside, I have purposely not read any of the posts before me so that I don't end up accidentally copying someone else's thoughts. However, the catch is that I'll probably be repeating something someone's already said anyway. Apologies to all in advance.

1. Every plot point must be necessary. By necessary I mean that it must have ultimate relevance to the story, characters or theme in some way or another.

2. Spectacle must TELL. Everything on stage (or not on stage) should have a purpose and should communicate.

3. Lines should be tight and memorable (not necessarily all epigrams à la Oscar Wilde, however.)

4. Dialogue and especially diction should say something about the characters who are speaking. (Sometimes it's not what they say but how they say it.)

5. Time sequence should also have a point. For example, what is added to the plot by presenting the story in a chronological order? Backwards? In flashbacks?

6. Actors should disappear into the characters. One of my personal pet peeves when watching a play is when I'm too distracted by an actor when I want to know his or her character.

7. Whether it be embedded in the play's themes, the characters, or the plot, there should be an element of universality to which the audience can connect-- something that resonates with them and makes them identify with/care about what's happening on stage. Otherwise, one wonders at the end of a play, "So what?"

8. It must be memorable!!!!!

I realized as I wrote these rules how often I come back to the theme of necessity and purpose-- how nothing should be present without a reason. Sorry for the over-emphasis... this is probably due to the fact that I personally tend to err on the side of lots of unnecessary or pointless dialogue, characters, etc. and am trying to learn to pare down my work to the bare bones.

Tuesday, April 7, 2009

Rules for Captivating, Intriguing Theater

Here are my definitive, undisputable, minutely researched rules for good theater, set in stone for all eternity.

(But “good” is a very vague word. By “good” I mean captivating and intriguing – keeping the audience’s attention for the entire duration of the play. If you think about it, that’s not a lot, actually. I’d say it’s the bare minimum you can ask of a story that’s being told to you. Whether it’s easy to achieve, however, is a whole different ball of wax.)

1) The play must speak for itself. Elements whose meaning depend on footnotes, background stories or anything relative to the writing process may add some enjoyment to the mix, but if any of them are necessary to grasp the core meaning of the play, it has failed on a very basic level. Above all else, the author must never explain his intention – and never need to.

2) The play must establish the rules by which it is going to be presented and abide by them. Suspension of disbelief may be broken and any or all of its elements may contradict reality (as it is acknowledged by humanity) or storytelling conventions in any manner or to any extent, but that deviation from the beaten path must make sense as part of the play. This rule applies to content as well as form. When the play has no particular plot or aesthetic statement establishing an unusual language or setting, the audience naturally assumes, by default, that they are watching a play set in the real world as they know it, and it in the dramatic language they are used to – e.g., chronological order, clear enunciation, stories ending with some sort of resolution, etc (in other words, it is impossible for a play to have no rules – either it defines its own or the viewer will). The more elements contradict the play’s rules, the less coherent the play seems in form, content or both. If the central elements or too many elements of the play violate the play’s rules, it has failed on a very basic level.

3) All the elements of the play must be motivated by a need of the play itself. In Aristotle’s words, everything must arise out of probability and necessity. The classical example of a failure in this sense is the Deus Ex Machina – the arbitrary ending where a conclusion is reached not as a resolution of the tensions and relationships developed throughout the play, but out of a new, last-minute element. Both Aristotle and the expression Deus Ex Machina refer specifically to plots, but anything can be gratuitous: a character trait (or even whole characters), a soundtrack or a lighting choice may also be dissonant from the whole play to the point of drawing the viewer’s attention to it from a formal perspective. The more elements are dissonant, the less cohesive and meaningful the play is. If the play has more random elements than motivated elements, the play has failed on a very basic level.

4) At least one element of the play must draw an emotional response from its audience. More often than not a character (or more), but it may as well be the plot itself. If viewers love it – or hate it – the play has succeeded. If viewers are indifferent to it, the play has failed on a very basic level.

5) The play’s duration must feel necessary to the viewer. It mustn’t feel too short or too long, regardless of its actual length. Three-hour epics may feel insufficient, and ten-minute sketches may feel too long. If the play’s duration calls attention to itself during the performance, the play has failed on a very basic level.

6) The meanings of the play or of its elements must be limited. A professor I had when I studied Visual Arts once said that “what can mean anything means nothing.” That may have been the most important thing I learned in that major. If no interpretation of the play can be denied or discarded, the play has failed on a very basic level.

7) The more important elements of the play must have more than one meaning. All art must have some sort of poetry, and there’s no poetry in anything that has only a literal meaning. If the audience can grasp no metaphor, allegory, symbolism, humor, pity, risk or some other sort of added value in the play as a whole or in its central elements (whether in form, content or both), it has failed on a very basic level.

As you can see, good theater is actually something very basic. Perhaps even more so: the more I think about it, the more I think rule #1 is the only one strictly necessary. Maybe #4 as well. It’s was in fact quite a struggle for me to fill up the 7-rule minimum. At any rate, these are the rules for good (not necessarily great) theater. There’s a lot more I find desirable in a play, but not necessary. If plays can still be good without it, I left it out.

The rules above are operational from the moment of their publication. Infringement of said laws may lead to severe civil and criminal penalties.

Another Dang Post About Good Theatre

This time there are RULES - rules for good playwriting (or "playwrighting", as I was taught to spell it on an earlier occasion):

  1. A play should never take itself to seriously - it must be self-aware to some extent and justify its own existence through its content.
  2. A play's first job is to entertain.
  3. A play must compel people to continue to watch the whole way through.
  4. Any play longer than two hours must have an intermission roughly every hour.
  5. Any play longer than three hours must mandate catering during said intermissions in the stage directions.
  6. Any play longer than four hours ought to be seperated into multiple plays.
  7. If your play is short enough, you can do whatever the hell you want. Bizarre experiments are always more acceptable when they only last a few minutes.
  8. If there is no dialogue, the stage directions ought to be pretty intricate.
  9. If there are no stage directions, the dialogue ought to be pretty intricate.
  10. One should always be able to glean more from performing the play than from simply reading it.
  11. One should always be able to find something interesting in reading the play that they didn't necessarily glean from a performance.
  12. Be specific; if something in the play matters to you, feel free to describe it in intricate detail - an accent, a prop, a set, a light cue, a costume, a speech pattern, anything.
  13. Don't specify everything; leave enough room so that a production team can keep its job. Once the director picks up your play, consider yourself dead - the play is the living work, not you. Don't direct from beyond the grave.
  14. Specifically forbid directors in your text from doing anything stupid and dumb that you hate. If something is really important, write a few guidelines right into the stage directions. God knows you're more brilliant than them.
  15. Clarity is essential; the audience must know what the hell was going on at all times.
  16. Leave anything unimportant to the imagination - this includes the fantastic elements of the play which the audience must lend to disbelief or what was actually in the briefcase or whatever.
  17. Include elements that don't move the plot forward but create a stronger sense of the world of the play. Before it can move, it must be established. Or by moving, it can establish.
  18. Surprise and intrigue.
  19. Your title will usually be much more memorable than your dialogue: make it good.
  20. If your play is a tragedy, some parts must be funny.
  21. If your play is a comedy, some parts must be VERY funny.
  22. Embrace the cliché. These are tried and tested. Every written work ever is the most cliché, overdone drivel in the history of the universe, and is completely unnecessary. Until you actually read it.
  23. Your play can fit a certain format criteria, but never must fall into one genre.
  24. Have a beginning, a middle, and an end.
  25. Always break all of every one of the rules, all of the time in every way.

7 Rules for Good Theatre

1. Plays should not be exclusively dramatic or comedic.  All works should contain elements of each genre, although they can lean heavily to one side.

2. Artists will be encouraged to be as creative and ingenuous as possible in their work.  The only real limitation to this is that nothing should be added that doesn't add to the plot, establish setting/mood, or help character development.  So no filler bits.

3. All directors, designers, cast, and crew have to complement one another's work to present a shared cohesive vision based on collaboration.  

4. In deciding what plays to produce for any given season, special consideration will be given to plays that are thought provoking and exhibit a social conscience.

5. When it is appropriate to the piece, plays should be performed in site specific spaces in nature and non-traditional settings like abandoned buildings and ruins.  This will help to expand the audience's viewpoint and experience of the play.

6. Plays should lend themselves to various interpretations.  The actors should have the freedom to explore each scene differently than the performance before, permitting themselves to always make discoveries.
***I wanted to say something related to Rule 6 in class today but we ran out of time. One of the reasons I was so intrigued by Poof!! In Movement is because while I sat there watching the performance endless story possibilities filled my mind given the dancers in front of me.  Afterwards I compared notes with my boyfriend, telling him that I thought the creatures represented a childlike aspect of human nature that is selfish and destructive and sometimes malicious.  He said he drew an opposite interpretation where the creatures were innocent and just playing around having fun.  I thought on it for awhile and decided that there were infinite tellings of what went on there, changing from spectator to spectator which made the piece very unique.

7. It doesn't have to be earth shattering but the end of the play should be one of the most, if not the most, memorable moment of the entire piece.

Rules of good theatre (or a play)

1. You do not talk about the PLAY.
2. You DO NOT talk about the PLAY.
3. If someone says "stop," goes limp, or taps out the PLAY is over.
4. Only two guys to a PLAY.
5. One PLAY at a time.
6. No shirts, no shoes.
7. PLAYS will go on as long as they have to.
8. If this is your first PLAY, you have to...write?

Okay, so number 8 was pretty lame. But I'm loving number 3.

Fight Club aside, here are a few rules I came up with:

1. The material and performance must challenge the audience in some way. It must cause the audience members to reflect on themselves (i.e. beliefs, character traits/flaws).
2. There should be a character that the audience either: a) loves to hate or b) hates to love.
3. I think a good script calls for the performers' own interpretation and improvisation. Not just that there's room for it, but really requires that each performer bring something to the table.
4. Not every play needs to end with resolution. Of course, the path from the play's beginning to end still needs to make sense even if the play doesn't wrap up nicely.
5. A playwright should not answer EVERY question. The audience should walk away wondering a little, thus giving them the opportunity to fill in their own stories. SOME loose ends are okay.
6. I think all playwrights/actors should incorporate the idea of GROWTH into their scripts/performances. There has to be a challenge, a feat, an exploration, a discovery.
7. A least one scene in a play should challenge the actor(s) mentally, emotionally, and vocally. Referencing Joseph Pilates and the lovely Andrea Beckham, I want to see the actors using their girdle of support, squeezing their juicy peach, and really speaking from their core.
8. There should be at least one character that reminds me of someone I know.
9. Sort of getting into spectacle, I think there should be some quality in the play or performance that causes audience members to avert their eyes or blush or shift in their seats. Whether it's simple costume choices or props, or maybe a sex scene or drug use. It can even be two characters discussing a controversial subject like war or abortion. Acting is reacting and I think theatre itself is a series of actions and reactions. It creates this unique dialogue between collaborators and the audience. Again, it's all about growing.

Good Theatre :)

(So after thinking about what makes good plays, musicals, dance pieces, and performance art in general, I came up with this.)

Good theatre includes:

1) A story that can be comprehended and reflected upon by the time the lights fall.
2) At least one character that is easily likable.
3) At least one character that the audience can feel unsympathetic toward.
4) Some sort of conflict or journey... a change that takes place throughout the piece (this is not to say that a piece cannot end the same way that it started... something just needs to happen in between).
5) Visual moments that vary in range.
6) Sound design that vary in range (from silence, to vocal inflections, to music, or percussive elements).
7) Actors that will invest and commit to their character within the story.
8) A universal theme or quality that everyone can relate to in some fashion.

I'll probably be adding more to this, but these were the most pressing, it seemed.
I am Completely incompetent, and have missed my blog post for at least the second time.

Whoooosh.  I'm going to get over it, and try to refrain from being a failure.

So, I got to see 16 of the new pieces that were part of the festival, and was really, REALLY inspired by everything.  I think it's really gutsy to put something that isn't completely polished out there for people to see- I'm that really annoying perfectionist who is bossy and unrealistic, and don't feel like I could've done that.  So I think it's a big deal to have presented something last week, and an even bigger deal if people loved it in its unfinished form.

I ended up voting for Footprints, Problem Box, and 101 Ways (before I even saw it...yes).

Footprints because I truly believe that it's not finished, and that there is so much more that it has to offer than what we were able to provide for New Works.  That, and I love Jenn and Lindsay, and think that they deserve to share their vision on a larger scale. 

I LOVED Problem Box because I thought the writing was genius.  I mean, I was thinking that I was going to be really bored, kind of like "Chekov told this short story already... snooze."  But I was completely floored- the idea of the box helping you sort out your life (employed by some and forced on others) automatically made the story more interesting than I thought it would be.  Bill is such an ass hole that you WANT to see him turn his life around, to feel remorse and start over.  And I had rejoiced when he and his wife got back together... but audibly gasped when I found out it was all just a trick of the box.  Great idea.  Great writing.  I want to see it again.

101 Ways took on a big responsibility.  I feel like the topics of body image, beauty, sex and relationships, and self-confidence are really touchy for both genders.  101 Ways responsibly broke down the materials that we read on a daily basis, extracting the truth, and analyzing the affects of these fashion magazines on their audience.  And, while this show was hilarious, I have to say that my favorite moments were the more serious monologue segments.  Tim and Jenny's in particular held some special resonance for me, and I thought that it was really... brave?  I guess?  to just put it all out there like that.  It meant a lot to me on a personal level, and I have a lot of respect for that entire cast.  I would love to see this project evolve into something even bigger.

On another note, I was absent the day we did the second full class clinic of everyone's plays!  I just realized this!  I would love to read anything that anyone wants to send me, and offer some constructive criticism.  I really enjoyed the first one.  (juliagytri@yahoo.com)

Can't wait to start long play sessions!

Julia :) 

New Works

Well, I managed to see a few shows during the festival in between rehearsals, performances, work, and class and want to comment on some.

Fernando and the Killer Queen was hysterical! Watching the play was like taking a roller coaster ride blindfolded. Each twist and turn was unexpected, thrilling, and bold. For example, when the queen first reveals herself. From the program you already knew that it was going to be a man, but it was such a surprise entrance and the actor owned every moment of it. I loved how each character was given these little nuances to play around with. I don't know how much of it was the playwright's doing or the director's, but they really gave a sense of individuality within the group, i.e. Brenda's almost OCD obsession with the wrinkles in her dress. My favorite thing about this piece was their manipulation of language: the way characters spoke, not so much in the third person, but as if reading stage directions, and how no matter what was going on, they had to respond immediately. 

Its interesting to note that a lot of the plays in the festival dealt with similar, if not identical, themes: myth, love, free will, discovering yourself, sex, finding oneself and that journey towards discovery. You saw it in The Psyche Project, 101 Ways, The 7, the Poet and the Philosopher, Fernando and the Killer Queen, and the Problem Box, to name a few. It shows that this generation has questions and a shares similar concerns over what issues need to be addressed.

101 Ways was a great show to watch because you weren't really seeing actors put on a role, but people expressing their own thoughts and opinions. The piece was truly a work of collaboration where every voice was acknowledged and given the freedom to express themselves uninhibited. Similar to The Psyche Project, the audience was laughing throughout the piece, essentially being set up for serious issue at hand, in this case, Jenny's monologue. A truly great piece of theatre has that power have you doubled over in laughter and then welling up with tears on the turn of a dime. I believe that this was brilliant accomplished  in a number of the works that were presented.

Overall, I think the festival showcased the tremendous amount of talent that arising from this department's students. I wouldn't say that everything I saw was flawless, but they all showed great potential and put forth a bold and unapologetic performance, and that should be acknowledged  and commended. 

Our Festival

I just want to say that I enjoyed reading and listening to everyone's plays. Everyone it seems has there own style and it forms naturally to create a voice. I took notes on everyone's, but only commented elaborately, especially on those I wasn't reading, on those that I was able to write about.

America: The Dream by Chibbi
This play really took my breath away and reminds me of a film called, "Elephant." Story about two boys who suffer through the pains of adolescence and wind up taking everyone out. It's a sad, harsh truth that really puts out a social problem we have in our world, and I think the play conveyed the images fantastically. Especially with the images on the projector.

Whispering by Julia
I absolutely love the characters you created. Alice as an old, worn out woman who suffers from amnesia is classic, yet you brought something new to the table by adding two separate scenes that depict what's reality and what's imagination. Great job. Alice is a character that I can see actually existing and everyone around her act the way they would around a sick person.

Confessions by Kat
This play was interesting to hear. It was too funny and too pathetic to see Jim's life blow up in his face. I liked the idea of karma coming around, I almost felt bad for Jim, and Mark for selling out his buddy.

The Elevator by Andy
Nice play. Very nice. It was smart, hilarious, and ultimately eye-opening. All the subtle hints the girlfriend was dropping about the man from the rape trial were all too delicious. It's like we know what's going to happen, and it suddenly flips and we're no longer in control of our own understanding of the play for a split second.

I Shot My Future Boyfriend by Autumn
I love the comedy in this play. It was all too real, and it seemed like something that can happen. Knowing this, I have to admit, heightens the hilarious moments. The relationship between the girls and their horrible accusations of others made me laugh alot harder. Using insults and quips on the basic level of comedy and heightening simple situations was done throughout this play and it worked sensationally.

Well, to all others, Michael, Zora, Burkard, Ashley, Brian, Sara, Lily, and Celso, I really enjoyed your ideas and your plays. I promise I have more to say about each, but then I'd be over-analyzing 10 minute plays. Thank you for sharing your brilliance.

Monday, April 6, 2009

"Resabios de Amargura" and "Footprints"

Sorry about the lateless of the hour. I ended up staying up a little later to finish studying and completely forgot about actually posting. I printed it out, but that's no good.

"Resabios de Amargura"
Although this play, or Bitter Cabaret as I should say, was short, the content was fabulous and made me wonder more about immigration than I already did. Love was a similar theme in this play as it was in Psyche Project, but it was a different kind of love I saw. This love was a love of one's heritage and homeland. The way that Beliza Narváez would present Lola Amapola and prance along stage singing about where her heart is and why it seems to jet off to another country, from state to state, is amazing. Her cunning use of the songs "Ropa Interior," "Protoplasma," and "What's the Point" really embrace how she feels about leaving her Puerto Rico, and really epitomizes the emotion that we all get when we leave something we love behind. Maybe love isn't the word I should use. I think because she grew accustomed to her life in Puerto Rico, leaving her land was the next step. And when she finally did it, there was nothing for her in the states. When Lola went back, there was nothing for her there, and that's where we last hear from her. Lola's perception and anunciation makes the audience laugh whenever she says or thinks something that is similar to Latin American culture. From the rolling of her r's to her dramatic behavior, Narváez is sensational in telling a story about a woman's struggle with immigrating to the U.S., and why her story is like a bitter cabaret.

I am always astonished whenever there is music in a play that encompasses the content and underlying message of the work. Footprints is a story about a young girl, Sophie, traveling through many obstacles all to help a tree that her father is going to knock down. She must travel to all corners of the Earth to collect some of the different types of elements, as I should say, to help the Tree. Sophie goes to the Goddesses of the Water, then to Goddesses of the Wind, and finally approaches the Sun. The singing was phenomenal and clearly explained everything that happened in the play and why it was so important for each element to leave its prime. Although I didn't enjoy the Sophie's singing as much, I did enjoy listening to the water creatures sing and especially the wind. I loved how each personified a certain element, and how each element sang why it was so important for them to exist. My personal favorite was the Sun. With a deep, beautiful voice that nearly made me cry, the young woman playing the Sun took the play from a seven straight to a ten. It was almost like a finale that happened before the end and was placed there to really "wow" the audience. It certainly did me. I especially liked the line, "It ain't fun being the Sun." Although this was a musical for children, I enjoyed it for what it was. The singing and imagination personified each being and made everything come to life. The underlying message I received was to better ourselves for the sake of everyone else. We're not the only ones who inhabit this world, and we can't act like we do.

Again, I apologize, Jenny, for the lateness in this post.

Thoughts on "Resabios de Amargura"

Since no one that I know of in our class was in this performance or saw it, I'm going to summarize it a little before discussing it.

"Cabaret" is about a Puerto Rican woman who moves from Puerto Rico to a town near the Canadian border to Los Angeles to New York and finds herself missing her original home.

It is a solo piece, and the actress behind the production took stories from her various friends' experiences with moving to the US. She said in the post-show discussion that she had friends who never wanted to go back to Puerto Rico once they moved away, friends who longed for the island, friends who moved back, and friends who did not want to move back, but felt guilty for feeling that way. Her story is about several different kinds of love: love for one's old country, new country, and romantic love.

The performance was partly in English, partly in Spanish, and partly in Spanish with English subtitles, which she said she did to privelege the Spanish speakers. I don't speak Spanish, but I didn't feel like I missed a beat. Her facial expressions and body language said it all.

I've never seen a monologue quite this long or elaborate.

And I loved how she would announce things like, "Okay, in a moment I'm going to change into a red shawl, and I will be playing the other character for awhile. Okay? Okay." This clarified things for me, and it was also just cute. Makes me wish this kind of thing was common on stage, sometimes I get confused.

And she talked to the audience like we were her best friend or her diary; we got to see her little quirks and flaws, and I thought she was really charming.

I didn't know much about Puerto Rico before seeing this, and I still don't know much, but I feel like I have a better idea of what it's like to be a transplant in a new place. She goes through a lot of trials, but she keeps smiling and singing through it all.

Nomadic Dream blog...

Honestly this was a play I went to see because I had free time. I thought it was going to be about the nomads...literally. NOT the case at all. I think this was one play I felt I could identify with considering at this point in my life I have been going through the thought of changing majors. I usually day dream about what my life would be like if I stayed in the major I have now and what it would be like if I changed it. This play completely exemplified this idea, on top of that I have had this fascination with dreams. I remember thinking, if I could live out my possible life choices it would make my life so much easier. I believe whom ever came up with this idea took it from real life experience then ran with it in their imagination. This is personally how I work when I write plays. If I had to choose who I would look up to in the future it would have been this playwright.

Our Mini Reading Festival

Berkhard's To the Core:
You fixed the guards, and Sabios part and made a play that was nearly cinematical, and took us to a different world, well done man!

Zora's House:
You finished!!! And might I say, you made something very “Lifetime” which in my book was very cool. It was real drama, and it felt smooth and complete thoroughly.

Josh: Sexy and Scandalous bro. It is rare that plays transcend past a story and leave you with a certain ambience, but with the dialogue you delivered, this play had a mood, and left us with an actual feeling. Well done.

Seriously? You call that a play? I’ve read comics off of Bazooka Bubble gum wrappers with more of a story. I’m just saying man, playwriting isn’t for everyone.

I know you weren’t totally happy with how it turned out (Because I was sitting next to you and you told me so) but to be honest I found it refreshingly original, and thoroughly well accomplished, in that you took on a topic of science, and made something that sounded well researched. Nice job dude.

Simply Hilarious! Enough said, it was my favorite.

Dude you clearly fixed the issues we were expressing in our small group, otherwise I had liked the idea from the start so I stand by what I had said before in that this was an interesting “realistic” play, and I found the dilemma quite thought provoking. (In a good way!)

This is a blog post about some of them New Works

So... instead of talking about Jenny's plays, of which I saw The Psyche Project and 101 Ways, or talking about plays in which I had some sort of mangly hand in, including Funky Snowman and The Mariner, I have decided to talk about the other plays I saw!

What I have to say about The Nomadic Dream Project:

Having worked on another child-oriented theatre piece with minimal dialog (Funky Snowman), rather than finding The Nomadic Dream Project silly or distant in its appeal, I approached it with the same seriousness I would approach work on my own project. After all, from the title, I had presumed the Nomadic Dream Project had something to do with the ancient folklore of wandering inuit tribes. That'll teach me a thing or two about being presumptuous.

However, the Nomadic Dream Project struck me as being extremely adult in its sensibility... it isn't a play about children, after all, it's about three self-respecting specialists in their respective positions, and a society of anthropromorphic sheep that seem to have some sort of control over their dreams. Perhaps at times they act like children, but really, the play is about exploring that space in dreams, where we can become anything we want to become, so perhaps these were just adults remembering the potential of who they could be rather than what they were in day to day life. And of course, they take their chance to share their craft with someone else in a way that the other might not expect, suggesting creativity, innovation, and looking for new voices and ideas. Things we all need in our respective fields of speciality.

Needless to say, I was very impressed. The staging was brilliant, if not marred by the million other outdoor events taking place on campus adding unwanted sounds and distractions. Such is the cost, I suppose, of being able to utilize ingeniously the carillon of the UT Main Tower. In the future, I'd hope to see this play stage in a better lit and perhaps more peaceful local. Some other city park with some other clocktower? A difficult thing to locate.

Costumes were of course, perfect. The setting was iconic - I enjoyed the encore presentation of the cart from La Curandera which I had the pleasure of getting to do welding work on during my tenure in the prop shop, now in a half-way space which better fits its mystical figure. The balloons... the bingo cage... of course the costumes, which instantly make each character and their roles recognizable. Despite the ambiguousness inherent to dreaming and the non-concrete space the play is set in, there is so much clarity in this play that we are never once lost in the product of a script with only two lines, both numbers.

The play is obviously the product of countless hours of work, in which each character was explored to a fantastic extent, always such that you have something to look at in viewing each of them: I would have loved to see the play three times and follow each of the three main characters the whole way through. The process of discovery in this play is brilliant and apparent, perhaps discovery is the theme of this play? Needless to say, I enjoyed every bit of it.

What I have to say about Phoenix Unforgiven:

I don't feel comfortable talking about it. After all, even if I didn't talk about performances, of which a few were lackluster, and the staging, which was quite distractingly poorly concieved, or the costumes, which served their purpose adequately but really aren't anything to talk about, or some of the special effects, which I just found a bit distracting, we're left with the writing. I want to say that this is good writing marred by a lot of technical problems and acting difficulties, but I can't. At its core, I just don't feel like this play was really ready yet for the stage.

Perhaps it's because I had recently read a lot about the Dirty War and the many atrocious acts of the Argentine government in the late 70's and early 80's, and that I had bothered to read the program notes, but I might have been one of the only ones in the room to understand the context of the play at all. I realized partway through that the unfamiliar last names jumping out at me and the continual references to what was simply called "the war" throughout the play were completely jarring. I can't remember if they even explicitly said "Argentina" during the play. I am just rather sure that somebody in the audience had to have been very lost, wondering whether this play is set in post-nazi germany or what.

Needless to say, it didn't seem like any specific historical event had anything to do with the play itself. The play came across as this deluge of cascading plot twists stemming from the lies of this old man, but none of them really seemed to have a heavy baring on the action, until the protaganist, Amanda, decides to throw away her school's sanctity on revealing the truth. This is tragic and reminds me of somewhat of Oedipus... he's bound to uncover the truth and thus destroy the whole foundation of everything he's worked for. Is it for better or for worse?

I had no idea that was what the play might be getting at until I sat through an hour and a half of soap opera-esque plot twists, gimmicky attempts at going beyond the linear world of the play, and occasionally brilliant performances simply swamped by somewhat unbearable ones, extreneous lines and speeches, and things which were so implausible and unmotivated for a character to actually say that I heard light chuckles being choked by polite gasps in the front row.

This play has a long way to go.

New Works Festival: 101 Ways

So... based on general consensus... and maybe it was just because of the cast... but I would defintely say that this was the hit/ talk of the festival. That being said, in spite of the long lines, I waited my forty five minutes, and my opinion.... it was totally worth it.

Now, first of all I have never seen a play like this before. Like all... commentary like? It was different for me, but I REALLY liked it. It was much more engaging on the audience's level in my opinion and that's what I truly appreciated. The way I saw it, the "Actors' wants" were to convey a message to the audience, and what better way than to just TALK TO THE AUDIENCE!
So as far as stylistically, I thought it was pretty darn cool.

But this was I what made the play worth it for me, and to be honest, though I did find it funny, the humor wasn't what made the play. It was the two monologues by the big guy , over the pressure placed on little girls and Jenny's over self security.
See, to me, those monologues WERE the play. And while the humor was real, and funny, it was merely the means to the end.

I don't know if this is the way it was ever viewed or planned. But in my personal opinion, to get an audience to a certain level of emotion one has to loosen them up somehow. Make them more vulneralble, or simply make them more emotional. Humor, is the perfect tool for such a task. And the humor from this play did just that. It got the crowd to drop their guard and lean completley in to the play. We were so entranced by it, that we would have raised our hands for anything, eaten any bowl of fruit loops we were handed, and listened to just about anything those actors had to say. The humor, was the jab that made us drop our hands down, and then BAM! The sucker punch.

Just when we were most vulnerable, and totally consumed, the tone is really set. The issue hits us square in the jaw, and I can't speak for everyone, but I felt it. I genuinely felt crushed, for both Jenny, and all the little girls, as were mentioned in the other monologue. Maybe I'm a big baby, but it's the truth.

So yes, 101 ways was the funny play, but in actuality, it was the real play. And it was pulled off so well, that I litterally felt it. Simply great.

Our own Works of the New...:-)

I would like to say first off that I enjoyed hearing everyone's plays! Everything was so different, unexpected and exciting. I am just writing on a mixture of plays from the two days we read. I do not have feedback for everyone sorry.

Hmm I will start with Andy's Play

Andy, wow. So at the start of the play I was like oh how sweet a couple. Then it got awkward because of her little elevator idea. Then I was curious as to what was going to happen. And at the ending I had a major "Oh Snap! Are you for serious?" moment. It was an emotional roller coaster, not like the bad rattlesnake roller coaster at six flags kind of way, but in the fun exciting Batman coaster kind of way. I Loved it! The twist at the end definitely sealed the deal for me! It was genius that she was the mother of the kid who went to jail and that their whole relationship was secretly built on revenge! ah gold!

Next up...KAT

Kat, I really enjoyed your play. The relationship between John and Mark was clear from the start. I knew that they were great friends having a phone conversation, I liked the twist that it was not just any phone conversation. It was being held over a live radio! There was an interesting thread which you wove in the plot that I really just ate up. The fact that the book which was written was made from confessions and here is this glorified Pulitzer prize winner confessing his sins over the radio. Not only this, but he is like the priest he wrote in his book! That's just something I took from it. I also liked your alternate ending, i think it went well with your piece.

uhm, lets do Josh!

Josh, Amelia is beautiful. I was held captive by the language you chose to accentuate the world you created. The world of a tortured man's mind. I like that to receive background information on our character a friend from the past must come to the future to settle debts and regrets. I think its amazing you wrote all of the lyrics for your songs. The idea of the women in flappers and men in tuxedos are not only characters but also pieces of the set is genius. As I have said before, it is cool that they pick up props or set pieces as they fall. The use of cloth in the suicide I enjoyed, has a dramatic theatrical air about it. Great work.

Julia, your play was wonderful. I like the change you made to the ending . The passing of the grandmother is softer and I think it blends well with the rest of your piece. For me it acts emotionally as a bridge between how I felt during Anne's tales of her fantasy life and then of her real life. The manner in which you chose to depict Anne's life was so creative! What can be more fake than Barbie?! Since Anne was telling a plastic version of her life, the choice of Barbie was very befitting. Great job!

Bryan, I really enjoyed the transformation of your play. Isabelle is definitely one of my favorite characters, I love her spunk. The elaboration of Nolly was great! I really like the surprise of his character you brought to the table. Your alternate ending was great. Everything really fit together in your rewrite. I have no more questions and as where before your piece felt open ended like there could be more, this ending provided enough closure. Like for example you were to expand this play. You could add something else behind this ending if you felt you needed to but it is most certainly not necessary. Also Great Job!

Well I am afraid that is all.Good bye everyone!

New Works Festival: Nomadic Dream...

This play was very good. I have no scale for it based on stars or alphabet or whatever... it was straight up good.

First off, it was a very interesting idea, for those who didn't see it, it was the switch of these three individuals from different lives through their dreams, so it's a lot to explain but baisically it was a story about different perspectives on life, and this was done through dreams.

To me it really struck a chord in that it was almost a play that symoblically represented the all-too-common college dillema of figuring out one's life without willingly forcing yourself into a box. Even though those in the play were professionals, the play was about a fresh start of the mind, and staying open to the fusion of ideas into something that may have never been done before. (Creating our "paper cakes" ;)

I also must comment on the tower play! Really, well done! It wasn't just a play in front of a tower, it was a play with a tower, and I loved that!