"Writing is rewriting"

I thought I'd post my notes on critiquing and editing. Just so they have a permanent place to live. :)

Liz Lerman: Critical response technique, criticism, post-show discussion, editing.
4 part system:
1. affirmation - the things you liked about the work.
2. artists asks questions - did you understand that...
3. audience asks questions
4. opinions

Artist - What was she doing...
Why did he react...
Did this make sense...
Moments unclear?
Time shifts...
Think about the things that are worrying you.

Audience - Don't put opinion in questions. Be careful with your question.
Opinions - rather than launching in. I have an opinion about...do you want to hear it?

My questions:
1. On a scale from 1-10, how dramatic was this piece?
2. What do you think is happening in the second flashback scene?
3. Does the timeline make sense? With the flashbacks?
4. How old do you think the characteristics are?
5. I felt like it needs to be fleshed out. It was hard to keep it only 8 pages long. Any opinions on this?
5. Did the stage directions clarify the scene?

"Omit needless words: Vigorous writing is concise. A sentence should contain no unnecessary words, a paragraph no unnecessary sentences, for the same reason that a drawing should have no unnecessary lines and a machine no unnecessary parts. This requires not that the writer make all his sentences short, or that he avoid all detail and treat his subjects only in outline, but that every word tell."